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- Rain Haiku
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From above they fall
Watery jewels in drops
refreshingly wet.
- COMMENTS
jthserraalmost 20 years agoas a haikuist, you want to observe the moment and present it, letting the reader intrepret the image. Here, by suggesting the raindrops look like jewels, you take that discovery away from the reader. In haiku, you want to present just what you observe, without coloring it with your take on what you see. And like Eve mentioned, the 5/7/5 is not a requirement in English language haiku. A nice poem that with a little work could be a good haiku.
jim : )
WickedEvealmost 20 years agoHaiku can be less than 5-7-5
You could try:
they fall
watery jewels
refreshing
