Raw

bycase28©

I like it raw
high gloss over run
with her saliva.
There'll be nothing
lingering between us
except for a film of her lush
viscous
Gewurz-tram-in-er.
I observe
from beneath her flesh
poised
perfectly pointed jaw
mute gasp as she
slips
it
in
her mouth.


Delectable Sashimi slam-mer
tantalising Nori-ng headlock.
Whores d'oeuvre Carpaccio
cures my bitter-salt vein.


Punching the raw carcass
breaking my bones
healing her butcher
with cleaver blow.
Yearling of my
heartache
pounding
the butcher's block
Frenching the fore-
skin from my bone.


The feeling I get
when sliced in two
medium rare won't cut it.
There's only one way
to serve me
viande crue, that's
glossy red-blue.


She likes her meat
well-done
I want it raw
to the bone.

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by case2807/26/13

Thank you so much for your great feedback, I'm actually pleasantly surprised by the response.

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by Desejo07/25/13

Yipes! Vegans be warned! I think this stretches the limits of metaphor but that is part of the intent.? Healing her butcher/with cleaver blow? I like the alternative word usage. I like how you have donemore...

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by HarryHill07/25/13

great poem although

Gewurz-tram-in-er is a German wine that I never cared for but it works so well! All the marbles.

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by case2807/25/13

Thank you very much for your feedback and comments.

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by twelveoone07/25/13

see that is the cool thing about comments

I was not inclined to leave one, probably on first sight alone.
I like it raw
and short lines and excess of hyphens and the end looks like a disaster. However it does have it's moments
see that is themore...

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