- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Recycled Paper
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Click hereI bought a ream of recycled paper, and
wondered what a palimpsest of
junk, bills, final demands, mail returned
"unknown at this address", missives or
pleas sent to God, wish-lists to Santa,
love-letters rejected
unopened or unreceived my
love-letter lay upon.
- COMMENTS
Desejoover 10 years agoI love the word palimpsest - especially in the sense that traces remain of the original manuscript/white board message/whatever. I think you could have done more with that aspect of the word -what ghosts might hover over the letter/ haunt it.
I'm not sure what "I bought a ream ...." adds to the poem. Why not: I use recycled paper or I write on recycled paper? And why the past tense?
Another tiny quibble, I don't think you need "a" before palimpsest.
Love the concept - I think this is good, just think it could be great. But feel free to ignore me!
Oldbear63over 10 years agoDidn't know where it was going but it seemed to be going down. I found the last line to be very poignant. 5'd
todski28over 10 years agoand a bit of the old google work to get this piece, the theme of recycled paper is really good when you run us through all the things that didn't make it to its desired destination, it lends a sense of nervousness to the piece when the final line is delivered, well done 5-ed
