- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Reflections on a Conversation
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I'm not broken,
Just badly made.
Careless, unthinking hands threw me on the potters wheel,
and roughly dug in with uncertain fingers,
waiting too long between revolutions,
angrily pushing against my weakness as if they could scare me to strength
I wasn't baked in the hot red flames of love,
but fired by neglect, and rejection
a pot eager to serve,
but leaking love and need until no one cared
My jagged edges cut when they should be easy to hold
and I tumble when I should remain still and patient
I demand a life that only perfect pieces deserve,
A place of honor, and respect and desire.
Even things badly made can care
about the way that wish they were
And hope for what can never be
But accept what is.
- COMMENTS
twelveoonealmost 11 years agofeel the first two lines should be italicized and made into one line, as if a quote
I'm not broken - just badly made. I am ambivalent about the last four lines, but feel the lines:
I demand a life that only perfect pieces deserve,
A place of honor, and respect and desire.
should say something else, 'demand' ? 'want' perhaps
but def 5 for interest
greenmountaineeralmost 11 years agoI differ with Desejo about the title, but she's spot on about the last stanza. I found myself saying "This is really interesting" until then. Still a good read though.
Desejoalmost 11 years agoI wish this was titled something like "Pot responds to Kettle". Since it is a poem (and maybe since I lack imagination) when I started reading the poem I hoped for a mirror, or a highly polished surface to actually "reflect" that conversation. That said, there are some nice images in this. The final stanza is weak, poetically and emotionally. I think the poem would be stronger without it. Well done, overall.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoBroken was more of metaphor than anything else... No one is broken, just no one is perfect.
