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you
my ether ore
pocketful of pyrite
grains pressed between fingertips
ever remember me
my gypsum man
jade charade with all
the shining lining of a
cloud of sterling
a precious metal
a dazzling gem
fuck the diamonds baby
they're not forever
nor my best friend.

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twelveoonetwelveooneover 18 years ago
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What can I say, you have a real load here, i.e.

"pocketful of pyrite" is just one example

and these last three lines...

"fuck the diamonds baby

they're not forever

nor my best friend."

Oh well, 100 is all I can do

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Fuck the diamonds

This is good. The sound of your poetry makes while reading it is part of the fun of it. Nice work!

LiarLiarover 18 years ago
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Clevely constructed, and a sharp whip crack in the end.

WickedEveWickedEveover 18 years ago
nice read

Enjoyed it. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
you write....

....as and what I wish I did.

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