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Click hereThe feel of her supple touch to mine
A feeling so sublime
She is my goddess, my divine
My young, beautiful muse
Something I could never just use
And abuse
Like a worn pair of shoes
Her locks curl and fall over my face
As she lies upon me in my embrace
Finally having the soul I have chased
Her lips touch mine, delicate and gentle
Like the petals of a rose, reversing the pentacle
Of time in my mind to a literal
Heaven, oh so spiritual
it is saying what you want to say. however, to achieve a more polished poem, you now need to keep a grip of those sentiments and work out a better way of saying what you want to say.
never force a line to get the rhyme. it's better to allow your poem to find its way like a river running naturally than to constrict it with ugly concrete banks.
good luck and keep writing!
If you're going to write in rhyming couplets do try to get the meter right