tagNon-Erotic PoetryRusted Chain

Rusted Chain

bywakingDown©

Holding them down
Against a wall
From running free

Drag at their time
Drain their energy
Hold their dedication

My broken body is
Their rusted chain

Their love for me
Is a key they won’t use
To go free

Sympathy is warden
That holds them bound
To my manacle being

My dependent carcass
Is their albatross

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by tazz31710/06/13

WHY HOLD SOMEONE DOWN

and not let them arise on their own, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Subbymaybe10/06/13

Never

My sweet, sweet friend; In the eyes of "them", they would never see you as a rusted chain. You are brilliant! And, I think you have a great sense of humor and even when you are "dark" you are stillmore...

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by Tristesse209/22/13

Powerful....

......and moving. You convey your situation and the emotions it brings well. Love heals if we let it.

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by todski2809/22/13

you paint your situation

and express the emotions strong. the idea of a rusted chain adds weight, strength and corrosion to the piece, which is reflected within

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by Ashesh909/21/13

My dependent carcass

Is their albatross

What depth of emotion : excellence in verse !

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