Rusted Chain

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wakingDown
wakingDown
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Holding them down
Against a wall
From running free

Drag at their time
Drain their energy
Hold their dedication

My broken body is
Their rusted chain

Their love for me
Is a key they won’t use
To go free

Sympathy is warden
That holds them bound
To my manacle being

My dependent carcass
Is their albatross

wakingDown
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tazz317tazz317over 10 years ago
WHY HOLD SOMEONE DOWN

and not let them arise on their own, TK U MLJ LV NV

SubbymaybeSubbymaybeover 10 years ago
Never

My sweet, sweet friend; In the eyes of "them", they would never see you as a rusted chain. You are brilliant! And, I think you have a great sense of humor and even when you are "dark" you are still my light! *heartya! *

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago
Powerful....

......and moving. You convey your situation and the emotions it brings well. Love heals if we let it.

todski28todski28over 10 years ago
you paint your situation

and express the emotions strong. the idea of a rusted chain adds weight, strength and corrosion to the piece, which is reflected within

Ashesh9Ashesh9over 10 years ago
My dependent carcass

Is their albatross

What depth of emotion : excellence in verse !

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