- Non-Erotic Poetry
- See Thru Me
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Click hereDon't look at me as others do
For what they see is a lie.
I'm taking off the mask for you
So keep looking in my eyes.
Listen to all I have to say
And have the courage to see -
Don't turn and walk away,
Just look. Look at the real me.
You think I am beautiful, unique
Its only make up, so turn the page -
The surface is skin deep.
Beneath the paint my skin is aged
And alcohol has seeped
To etch red-spider patterned veins.
Life slipped through my hands
I held on but suffered sadness,
My efforts to understand
Paid me back with madness.
I carry scars - scars from life
Because once the only way out
Was to cut at the pain with a knife.
Doubt riddled me like woodworm,
Pressing through my flesh
I'd ease my fear by throwing up
Till nothing of me was left.
None of my life has been easy,
Most of it has been hell
So now that you see me
Please understand me well:
I have known despair and fear
I have been hopeless and lost,
But I have survived, I'm still here -
Taking on life despite its cost,
I have been battered and bruised,
Life has been hard for me,
Hard in every way - but I have used
Some of this to get by,
And this is the real me.
I don't want to cover it or hide -
I just want to show you
Who I am inside.
And now you see the real me,
Say you want to stay.
Tell me that I'm beautiful,
And love me anyway.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 16 years agoThe fourth strophe is {in my mind} the weakest part of your poem; it says explicitly much of what has already been implied. It feels redundant compared to the rest of a much stronger 3 strophe poem.
Angelineover 16 years agoI think you could cut it back some and make it a more effective poem. I especially like the second strophe which is pretty packed with interesting imagery, compared to the rest of the poem.
Your poem has been recommended today in the New Poem Review thread on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read. :)
