tagNon-Erotic PoetrySign Language

Sign Language

bytodski28©

Stare at my hands and dare them to speak
the scars that blink as they move
tri-tone paint splattered callouses
mix with fresh cut skin

Fingers thick and clumsy
beaten and moulded
by heavy weights, hard work
and hours of hitting a heavy bag

they have punched brick
smashed plasterboard
one knuckle still in two
from an errant tooth
in a bar room brawl

the story they most want to tell
is the day they held you

gentle
and shaking wept
for fear they were too clumsy
to hold your fragility
a triumph as we cradled you
to our heart

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by Oldbear6306/24/14

Your best, Todski, IMHO

The description of the working hands coming down to the ending is really strong and beautiful. Wish Lesse could read it.

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by pelegrino06/23/14

I have really nothing to add to all previous comments. I thank them for their insights and thank you for sharing it. I admired it very much!
5ed & recommend.

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by todski2806/23/14

thank you

1201 for your thoughts it makes sense, I appreciate the effort you have put in to help myself as a writer, it's time that you give for free to give feedback that benefits all involved.

@ cleardaynow Imore...

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by twelveoone06/22/14

I knew this feeling

once, too well - I am going to speak to you as a technician, in two years you have earned it. I read S1 (it is amazing) it is a unique description, poetry without poetisms. Then the language becomes simple,more...

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by Cleardaynow06/22/14

Very good

I really like how you draw us in by the description of your hands and then cut to the heart of the poem.

The device of vivid description followed by a relevant switch to feeling seems a departure frommore...

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