Silk Slip Of Nothing

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blue thoughts try and tie
me down.
only I have red
in mind.
a silk slip of nothing
sliding over nipples.
caressing
staking claim to my hills
and valleys of wet moistness
melt, make milky cum come
betwixt two pink lips
that just beg to be kissed ...

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Bill DadaBill Dadaover 17 years ago
^

After reading your poem, I'm the one begging.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
weird

Some of the line breaks seem weird.

"me down" alone on one line doesn't work well.

The internal rhyme in the first line is okay.

Too many gerunds for such a brief poem: sliding, caressing, staking.

Why not use a silk slip of nothing

slides over nipples,

caressing,

staking claim to my hills

and valleys of wet moistness...

Hills and valleys and wet moistness is so overused in erotic poetry.

milky cum come

betwixt two pink lips

cum come?

betwixt sounds wrong in this poem!

The ending is predictable.

Exercising my right to: ("Love it? Hate it? Have suggestions? You can leave a public comment on this submission!)

sincerely,

unregistered and anonymous but avid reader

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
I love...

the tongue-two-stepping amazement in this poem, "melt, make milky cum come," "staking claim," "betwixt two pink lips." Makes my mouth want to keep bumbling away and finally surrender in a wordless wolf whislte of stiff appreciation.

What I'm wondering, though, is how you know I dream in such vivid color? <evil grin>

~S&D

bigntenderbigntenderover 17 years ago
colorful!

the colors run through the poem and hold it together. very sensuous!

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailover 17 years ago
slip of nothing

what more could you possibly add (~_*) <grin, perfectly placed words like clothes scattered on a stairway, ascending, before ya know it your there in a silk slip doing something <grin... excellent!

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