Tanka for Tanya

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You lay in my bed.
The mockingbird said, “Please don’t.”
The snake said, “Please do.”
You were alive, I not dead:
when you sing, I think of you.


 

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KOLKOREKOLKOREover 16 years ago
The silence in one's heart

I humbly thank you for introducing me to the Tanka. It's truly humbling to read that this form preceded the Haiku and was so essential to the Japanese culture 1300 years ago, as virtually no event could come to it’s conclusion without a taka written about it! <P>

To me, your poem felt more like an intimate confession over an ongoing state of emotional affairs rather than a captured moment in time as the Tanka form asks. Nevertheless, the haunting images captured the loneliness in loveless relations.

p.s. I can't figure out how this poem and at least one more original poem by this poet have not even been mentioned let alone given any comment, despite the fact that at the least an original effort have been made to combine a formal form of art with personal content. I don't see too many efforts of this nature posted around here every day.

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