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Click hereThe Dust Plum:
Loved more, Lives less
Purple this tree, burned like a wart -
a wrinkle-rind mahogany with tractor-dust
upon its leaves:
each tick’s belly neither russet–grey nor blue.
Purple this tree engorged with spring.
He watches – a black street between –
his sister undressed one Crow at a stroke.
Ten yokes of youth – imposed by the seed –
mellow from green to fallow, between.
She, the bigger, with mustard leaves,
drowns the hydrant, crowds the heat,
and greedily fucks the sun god raw –
She bakes her candies orange from plum.
Sores on the mouth’s socket-tongue
suck nerve-blood brown down salted teeth.
Could she fruit a fig, she'd shred her sleeves.
She knocks her Mother's Clay - with knitting pins like hands -
and sinks her knuckles to their knobs in ferric, unfit soil.
An ape-man leaves this weed to spoil.
There is a Tree in Heaven, called the flower of paradise –
she'll catch upon your clothes and cling till death.
Cross the blossom once...incensed till death.
Hair, stones, ashes, shit,
tannic mulch, rainful fits,
a squirrel stands upon the barbecue pit.
And it is good to be writing,
good to reflect.
and I wish there were a level between 75 and 100. I hate to leave a "grade" like this on such a good work. However, you lost me, something changed when you got to the Mother Earth part. I dont know what it was, the rhythm, or the rhyme, I will read again. Buut you have some marvelous imagery. The colors you describe are magnificent and the descriptions of hands and tongue..just beautuful work. hope to read more of yours :)
maria
yes yes
this comment is of no use except to say
yes, this is good writing
hope to see more of my fellow southpaw
~aswirls