- Non-Erotic Poetry
- The Pit Dance
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Dancing In the Pit
the heart is not a drum beat for love
love is a mental trip
I take my heart-beat to war
fists striking nothing
random bodies
nothing, again
as if to stave off invisible forces:
Sameness, Age, Giving In,
growing Up
each 1/64th beat on stage
mirrors the instrument in my chest
every cymbal fill,
my aching breath
a guitar God,
Aloof
Distant
Enraptured
picks a fast rhythm
to claw its way into you
ripping your eardrums open
throwing you into the war dance
every thumping chord is
a reason to lash out,
love thy neighbor
with an elbow, a knee
We are sixty sweating bodies
We are one spirit not afraid
We are the modern tribe
the pit is our right of passage
moshing is for pussies,
throw a punch
spin-kick
windmill your arms
don’t run into me,
that’s cheating me out of absolution
cheating yourself out of a chance
For three minutes,
I’ll be your demons
if you’ll be mine.
No fear
No anger
No hurt
Just a lifetime of unrelenting passion
sometimes a kick in the face
We are not old enough to remember war
just old enough to glorify it, a little,
to believe in the honor of battle
we’d love to be modern samurai
we are just
children punching the air
kicking each other
with an odd kind of love and affection
that only lasts as long as the next song
Crazy to the last one
- COMMENTS
Maria2394over 19 years agopen, or finger, as it were ;) very enjoyable read, keep em coming ~~~ maria
Liarover 19 years ago"...written in a driven pace and with a sharp language..."
tarablackwood22over 19 years ago...is very interesting and likable, and there is a lot here to consider and marvel over. I find its structure a bit too rambling in spots, and think some reworking -- separation and paring -- might benefit it. Small point there....this was engrossing.
jd4georgeover 19 years agobut the music and beat made up for it, though not always at the same time. I loved the line "cheating me out of absolution".
lostandfounderover 19 years agoDon't feel anything but the music.
It isn't until I see people staring that I even know I'm bleeding.
"No fear
No anger
No hurt"
Amen.
Great poem.
