- Erotic Poetry
- transcendental lay
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Click hereno need for dreams below grass,
simply to touch god. i lean into him
with your every breath
over my back,
along the arch,
down to urgency.
rock me steadily into heaven.
and how can such bliss
(such a shameless affair)
seduce me beyond clouds
haloing in the sky?
all is divine in that moment
before i tremble to earth.
copyright d. dixon
12/28/04
- COMMENTS
unknownmuseover 4 years agoWhy do people pick at what they perceive as the technical? It’s art. How does it make you feel? Does anything else matter?
jthserraabout 14 years agohaloing in the sky... Incredible, erotic images. You are simply the best.
jth
lorencinoalmost 15 years ago<br>I think this works perfectly. The parenthesis is useful to indicate the kind of breakaway you need at that point and the line:
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rock me steadily into heaven.<br><br>
is an additional aspect to the lovemaking situation that fills out the scene perfectly rather than being a contaminant of an otherwise good poem. There are different levels of intimacy and awareness in the act that the poet is depicting and that steady mindless plateau that one achieves on the ascent to heaven provides a contrast to some of the other stages described in this poem. <br><br>
It is a good poem because it mirrors the range of physicality in the sex act rather than attempting to be the "pure" poem which would betray the content. The form mirrors the content delightfully. The poet displays mastery in this.<br>
vrosej10almost 15 years agoWow. That was one of the best poems I have EVER read. Go Wicked Eve!
live4passionalmost 15 years ago"dreams below grass to touch god".. death.. the tension and incongruence of the divine enfolded in the illicit.. very beautiful
