- Erotic Poetry
- Villanelle No. 1, To My Lover
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Click hereAs we both settle down to rest,
Our loving done (but not complete),
I lay my hand upon her breast.
I gaze upon her, auburn-tressed
And smiling as she will, so sweet,
As we both settle down to rest;
And realize I'm very blessed
To lover her. As our bodies meet,
I lay my hand upon her breast.
No worried thought can be my guest,
And daily cares cannot compete
As we both settle down to rest.
(I must confess a certain zest
In feeling of her bosoms' heat;
I lay my hand upon her breast.)
We've made a life. I love her best
For loving me without defeat.
As we both settle down to rest,
I lay my hand upon her breast.
- COMMENTS
foehn2over 14 years agoI think there is a typo in the second line of the third stanza, but in general, the Villanelle is one of the hardest forms to master, and this effort is worthy of comparison to Thomas Dylan, Theodore Roethke, and others who have achieved fame. Fame is fleeting, and capricious, of course. But a poem like this one will last forever.
EroticOrogenyover 14 years agoVillanelle flows nicely, with repeated lines not being blatant. One question - don't see why need to put parentheses around 5th stanza
SweetOblivionover 14 years agoand well scanned too - worthy of a smile and light applause in attending your next effort. Sweet O.
