tagNon-Erotic PoetryVisiting Hour

Visiting Hour

byTristesse2©

The desert
I must cross
to reach you
gets wider
every day.
No oasis to offer
hope or soften
the harshness of this
journey
only I must make.

Behind me footsteps come
from a place
we both have made,
before me, on the next
wave, a shimmering
mirage of what you
used to be. If I strain
to hold you, keep you
with me, the mirage melts
leaving me
weeping at the insult.

You are the innocent
smiling with no
recognition. I too am
sinless, mourning
the loss of the living
and dying of thirst

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by UnderYourSpell08/20/13

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This speaks to me of Alzheimers and I pray to goodness it's not a path you have to take. It's a painful read but still beautiful for all that

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by Desejo08/20/13

This is gorgeous. The line breaks perfectly set a tone that is as if someone is gasping out last words. Just beautiful.

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by todski2808/18/13

I don't even know

how to comment. this reminds me so much of my brother I almost cried I don't know if it is personal but you definitely stomped on my emotional sensors

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by Angeline08/18/13

This poem is heartbreaking

and to evoke that reaction tells me how good it is. I've read it three times now and the line breaks and flow are so good, no wasted words. I wish this is fiction but either way I think you have learnedmore...

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by HarryHill08/18/13

Loved this the first time I saw it, haunting

the comparisons between what was and what is are painful to read also pleasurable.

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