When I walk

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When I walk
I look through the window of the world

Grubby little boys playing softball in the mud
Fat women on the beach, stuffing their faces

Lovers walking hand in hand, contented hearts
and an ancient form through the glass door

I wonder about that wizened visage
Is she watching me as I am watching her?

Another Eleanor Rigby, perhaps?
And whose face is she wearing today?

The thoughts are fleeting as my steps quicken
away from death, towards the gentle light

Where the grubby little boys are arguing
a double, or a triple?

And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle
hamburger juice trickling down double chins

As the lovers gaze contentedly
into each others eyes
contemplating the universe

But I can still hear the sirens' song
the long sigh, the silent scream

and in my heart, my heaving heart
I know full well

I will return...

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duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Windows.

What a wonderful way of viewing your surroundings. The world as a window. The many varied things to be looked at, examined and comtemplated. Beautiful with rich images.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
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Oh, this is good, sack! I was right there with you. Great poetry!

I really like these lines:

And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle

hamburger juice trickling down double chins

What an image, and an awesome ending! What I'd call a killer one! Well done!

Honey123Honey123over 18 years ago
Your poem

gave me such mixed emotions. I smiled, I laughed and then I felt sad. I had such a tugging in my heart...

~Honey

RhymeFairyRhymeFairyalmost 19 years ago
Heartfelt~

I Love the simplicity.

Your wording is spot on.

I look and see*

Great flow, and super great wording~!!

More Please~

dcpoet44dcpoet44almost 19 years ago
you better.....

as i'm sold on this image:

And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle

hamburger juice trickling down double chins

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overall it is a smoking poem......don

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