zmp~ rock garden

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zmp~ rock garden

Granuals of sand upon a table's top
scattered along a box's fence
harvest rows in meticulous miniture
stillness in perfectly rippled dunes
surrounding islands of various polished stones
an endless sea of artistic possibilities
place-setting Earth's life-less beauty
hand and rake over the Rock Garden

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WantonWenchWantonWenchover 17 years ago
Couldn't resist

Grains of sand across a table's top

scattered from the box's fence

formed in meticulous miniature

stillness in perfectly rippled dunes

lapping isles of polished stones

in endless possibilities

from a finite sea

a place setting of Earth's lifeless beauty

hand and rake over the Rock Garden

Honestly I think it great hubris to rewrite somebody else's work, but as somebody else did it once already in these comments, I found it working in my mind. I hope you aren't offended. Only you know exactly what you were evoking, the rest of us only reflect.

Very lovely work. :)

WantonWenchWantonWenchover 17 years ago
Couldn't resist

Grains of sand across a table's top

scattered from the box's fence

formed in meticulous miniature

stillness in perfectly rippled dunes

lapping isles of polished stones

in endless possibilities

from a finite sea

a place setting of Earth's lifeless beauty

hand and rake over the Rock Garden

Honestly I think it great hubris to rewrite somebody else's work, but as somebody else did it once already in these comments, I found it working in my mind. I hope you aren't offended. Only you know exactly what you were evoking, the rest of us only reflect.

Very lovely work. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Once more.......

.........the Zen Master paints a peacceful image. Nice.

Tess

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Nice image,

but I believe this poem is a little complicated in word choices. Perhaps pare down; make the beauty its 'zenplicity'.

Isn't interesting the things you can find in nature and apply it human instinct/thoughts? Good poem idea.

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
~~

Du & WE make excellent points;

I've tried 3 times to read through this

And each time got hung up on the very first word ~ granules.

Still, it's loaded with excellent lines and phrases.

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