ZMP~ when turtles dance

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Rippled water slapping lightly
against a log, close to shore.

One end sloped into the river,
the log gradually rose upward.

A row of turtles bask in the sun
on this log was room for no more.

A turtle swam up to this log
and crawled up the 'ramp' side.

Each turtle inched upward, pushing more
to make some more room for the new.

Bumping, stepping, tiny feet shuffling,
each shell 'clanking' and 'scraping!'

Side stepping at the gathering
toe to toe and long necks rose.

Till finally the turtle that's at the top
is nudged to a dive, in the water it plopped!

Rippled water splashing loudly
near this log close to shore.

Up to the log this turtle came swimming.
Starting back up, the ramp's, begining.

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Jennifer CJennifer Calmost 19 years ago
plopped

what a great word!

Loved it Art.

Thanks.

~ J

WickedEveWickedEvealmost 19 years ago
plop

It's nice and cute, but I hate plopped. I hope your posse doesn't get all fuzzed up and fretful that I hate your plop. lol

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 19 years ago
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Art no need for ! on either line, would avoid it

here is your weak line: rather awkward

"is nudged to a dive, in the water it plopped!"

the repeat is nice and well placed

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 19 years ago
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Art no need here for ! for either line

Here is your weak line, it is rather awkward

"is nudged to a dive, in the water it plopped!"

The repeat is a nice touch, fits well where you put it.