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I was the last of one line, the founder of a new. I was Justice; the balance, the light and dark in harmony. I was love and vengeance, good and evil. I knew where I had come from, but where I was going was yet unwritten. In many ways, I was the mirror for Antal and those who came before.
I knew what had gotten Antal in the end. The seduction of power. When everyone bowed to you and the world was yours, somehow all you wanted was more. It was an easy thing to succumb to, and I swear her painting taunted me with whispered promises of further glories, if only I too would seek more.
I turned at last and headed for my bedchamber where naked my consorts waited. Slim and light, powerful and dark. They saw the whip and both raised a brow.
" Think it's about time I let one of you handle this again," I said with a smile.
I said the corruption of absolute power was an easy thing to succumb to, I never said I would. Mastering your own destiny; that was the goal of my rein.
Love was the greatest power on earth, and I lost myself to it. Antal's predecessor had given up the man she loved for me and allowed a viper into her home as a result; Antal had destroyed her world for the woman she loved. And I...for the two men I loved, I would build the world in an image of love so that all may taste the power the rules us all, Queen and pauper alike.
And that is the story of the ascension of Virtal the Just, founder of the Larenct line, taken at the dawn of the Era of Two Moons.
- COMMENTS
Kayakbabeover 7 years agoSeriously publish this. It is worthy to be in physical form on paper. Thank you for putting here on lit.
Jhyralmost 12 years agoSo I was wrong about thinking that Lucius was a traitorous snake just because he was pretty... ;-)
Now on to the 'criticism' - or let's just call it my personal opinion, that would be more accurate, I guess...
While I enjoyed the mummies, I don't think they were entirely necessary. Until their appearance, the story was much more like an 'alternate history' setting... maybe you could have done something along the lines of the evil priestesses taking up arms, or something?
I'm just mentioning this because I found the introduction of MUMMIES! MAGIC! kind of jarring.
Virtal's feelings of being filled with the powers of a god and/or goddess can be explained away with religious rapture, and the whole setting had a feeling of reality to it, until... MUMMIES!!!!
Meh. I hope you get what I'm trying to say (if you ever read this).
Furthermore I think that your writing is wonderfully vivid... part of me was living in the world that you created.
I think that is one of the greatest gifts a writer can have.
ladybug71about 12 years agoThis story was absolutely AMAZING!!! Now it's on to Fey World....but I hope you continue to keep writing even after Fey World ends!! You are a marvelous writer and I have loved reading all of your books!!!
