I decided to go for broke. I managed to get one hand from the rail above me and move it to her breast. I pinched her nipple and she open her eyes and looked back at me. I could tell by the look in her eyes she was getting into it. I pinched her nipples as I rocked inside of her. The whole time she was clinching her sphincter muscles over and over. Her breathing got more and more labored as did mine.
Here I was fucking someone that I didn't like and didn't like me in the ass on a public bus. That realization was just too much for me. I could feel it building up and told her I was about to cum. She actually moaned and clinched really hard on my dick. Luckily we were right next to the engine and no one could hear us. Hell, we could barely hear each other. I felt her quiver all over and she got tense. I couldn't believe it. She was cumming. That was all I could take. I dumped my load right in her dumper. I came hard, really hard. I came so much it was almost like I was pissing inside her.
Finally though, I calmed down and so did she. My dick also calmed down and as she had said it slipped out of her. We stood there quietly pressed to one another until we reached my stop. We shoved our way through the crowd and out the door.
Our walk to my house was very uneventful. Neither of us said a word. When we got to my house I pointed to the bathroom and went to my room for some clothes. I managed to find her some of my shorts with a draw string so they would stay up on her. I knocked on the bathroom door and left them right outside the door. I knew she was probably embarrassed and didn't want to face me. I was embarrassed too. We didn't say a word on the way to her house. When we finally arrived I stared blackly out the front windshield and said, "I am sorry Julie. I didn't mean for that to happen."
"Neither of us meant for it to happen it just did. But this will stay between us." She quietly said, not looking at me.
"I am not going to tell anyone, it will be our little secret." I said, still not looking.
Then she did something that totally shocked me. She very quickly reached over and kissed me on the cheek. She also very quickly got out of the car and started heading to her house.
I wonder what the kiss on the cheek was all about?
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I am not sure what direction I should take this. I could simply leave it like this, make it so they have other incidents like this, make it so Jeff has other incidents like this with other women or even make it so they eventually fall in love. If there is enough encouragement I would be glad to develop it farther.
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A very enjoyable read
A lot of stories here are paint-by-the-number. They would have gone straight to the bus scene. Your coconut-salt smell, incoming rain feel, and sandbank water dynamics created an interesting world. And then the dynamics of the girl and the guy hating each other, yet being forced to share a sandbank until tide changes created a lot of intrigue and tension to what was going to happen.
The whole idea of his cock in her bum by "complete" accident is completely ludicrous. However, you spoon fed the development slowly from the beginning of her just not wanting to be rescued to admitting a rare, yet plausible loss of bottoms. The slow spoon feeding let me accept the "reality" of it bit by bit.
I think you are asking where to take the story, because it can't really go anywhere. To borrow from improv comedy, a scene is either about a game or relationship. A game in improv comedy is a repeatable thing that gets heightened over and over, e.g. the dog stealing first a bone, then the shoes, and more and more. Your story was mostly game based. You heightened their "accidents" to anal in a public bus. If you heighten it more, it'll get grotesque like everyone in the bus joining or monsters appearing and joining.
You had some good relationship bits, e.g. the hate between the two. You started dissolving the hate with her kiss on the cheek. That was cool for how the story is. It could have been something interesting to build out. You could have heightened the hate between the two and how they develop. A continuation could "drop" the game and build out their relationship (relationship = how they relate to each other, not necessarily romantic relationship). Then the game was merely how they met, and it's really about the relationship. Of course, later another game/accident can happen again embedded in their lives (happen organic rather than the whole story being a series of accidents).
Of course, you can always invent something new and take the story wherever you want to. I really enjoyed the backstory and atmosphere that you created. Bravo!more...
I really like the story and I think you need to continue it, maybe in the direction they get together. I like both your stories, but you really need to continue and finish them.
Well done
I think after that luck on the bus you could tell him or some other dude who rides busses and trains looking for pantyless girls to fuck anonymously and dump a load in, maybe even knock up. Keep it up
ALMOST DROWNED....NO CLOTHES....NO CAR
cheer up and it did. TK U MLJ LV NV ps I think you could have a winner with Jeffs character, mlj
it would be great to have other things happen between them.
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