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"My God Bel, you are so beautiful. So gorgeous. More then I ever knew. I'm going to make you feel so good, sweetheart." He breathed desperately to her.
Belinda couldn't suppress another moan as she stared up at him in awe. This beautiful man straddling her thighs, wanting her so much, with a look of lust and fire in his emerald eyes burning a hole in her soul, was gazing down at her beauty. She was lost for words as she returned his stare, not sure of what to say. Only a look like his could mean one thing. He wanted her.
- COMMENTS
BradsBabygirlalmost 16 years agoAuthorAhh yes, the sun/moon issue was pointed out to me the other day. Thank you for that. *smiles* I guess I was too worked up during the writing of the story, that I must have become fague and confused. *grins*
Anonymousalmost 16 years agoOne small problem. At the beginning of Ch. 02 you said the sun was shining through the curtains, but at the bottom of page one you said the only light they had was the moon light coming in. Otherwise, good job so far.
Anonymousalmost 16 years agoI like how the story is unfolding, that you're not rushing the characters. Btw, 1.32 is also correct. In some parts of the world, that's how it's written. :) Hope to see the next chapter soon, and shorten your paragraphs, some are quite difficult to read.
BradsBabygirlalmost 16 years agoAuthorApparently I have been told from some recent feedback that the 'correct' format of time is 1:32 as opposed to 1.32. Obviously this IS correct, but I don't have an excuse as to my foolish mishap in regards to this.
So for the little punk with the attitude who told me to "get with the world", I sincerely apologize (not) if I've offended your intelligence.
Thank you to those who have left some nice feedback, it's appreciated. *smiles*
