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"Sandy?" Keven said weakly, struggling to his hands and knees. "Sandy!"
I staggered over and knelt beside him. "I was thinking this was the best getaway ever, but I take it all back. You're going to have to do much better than this if you want to keep getting lucky." The energy was deserting me and it was so hard to move.
He pulled himself up and then pulled me up with him, taking in the scene on the patio quietly. "I can't wait to find out what I missed."
I hissed when he touched my broken arm and he yanked his hand back. "It's broken, and your ex is dead. Help me to the sink and call for help."
Becoming ever more steady on his feet, Keven helped me inside, grabbed my cell phone out of my purse and called 911. When he was done, he helped me wash the gasoline off and sat me down in a kitchen chair. I sat in the dark until he got the lights back on and came back. He had a robe that I could cover myself with and I managed to get it on and sit back down without falling over.
Keven's head was bloody and he looked like someone had hit him with a silverware drawer. I'm sure we made quite the pair. He pulled out a chair and sat heavily beside me. "I don't suppose I can have a do-over?" he asked.
"Nope," I said with a scratchy laugh. "We don't do those. But I will let you take me on a cruise when my arm heals."
"I suppose that's the least I can do for getting you into this mess," he agreed with a smile. He kissed my good hand softly. "I love you, Sandy."
"Damned right. I love you." I said.
We'd be just fine after all.
The End
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 15 years agoI was re-reading it again because i remember the stroy but I couldnt remember the end. which i gotta say it isent normal for me, I got a frotographic memory!!! I love the sotry and i always have love the "bad boy turn good" But the end not that good is kind of like a sumary of what is going to hapend in the chapter. Was Snake eyes really the bad guy that burned the painting or was it the crazy ex-girlfriend in the beginig i thought it was going to be her but then you droped the carachter and i forgot about her. I think it has the makings of a great story but the end needs a revision. And i think if you make it longer and do re-wright the end you could even send it to a few publisher and it would be picked up. 100 for the story 25 for the end.
Anonymousover 17 years agothe story was great until this chapter you can see that it was rush and it looks like you just want it to finish it and thats disapointing because it had the makings of a good even great story.
Emerald_Ariover 17 years agoThe first few chapters moved so slowly and the end was too rushed....
Anonymousover 17 years agobetter than most writing, but i judge this to be your worse story so far.
lotta read herrings, kinda.
the car jacker is intro-ed and dead in a chapter.
the arsonist is intro-ed with the car jacker, goes around burning buildings and threatening lives so they run, but he is caught off stage.
but the big threat and the killing comes out of no where as the insane/jilted ex-lover (TM), and she is blown away.
and then it ends. somehow unsatisfying.
jzimmerliover 17 years agoI am a little suprised that you ended it so soon, but it was great. I am looking forward to your next story.
