The Awakening Ch. 01

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A mysterious girl attacks him in the woods.
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Part 1 of the 2 part series

Updated 10/27/2022
Created 01/05/2015
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Michael liked the night. He especially liked the stars. To him they seemed like millions of eyes observing him and everyone else on Earth. At night everything was sharper-smells, sounds even noises. The eighteen year old had just graduated high school and this night out in the woods, which surrounded the small town of Ravenville was his way of celebrating. His parents would probably have their own gifts for him, but that would come later. Right now he only wanted to be alone, away from civilisation and enjoy the night, alone. He was a loner by nature and by inclination.

Michael drifted back to that time in his 8th grade. His hands formed into fists almost unconsciously. He remembered the feel of his blows landing on Kevin's face. He also remembered the kick that had broken the kneecap. Michael shook his head from side to side to get rid of the recollections. That was in the past, something he wanted to forget. With a small sigh he looked back up into the sky still lost in his thoughts.

So when the attack came he was completely unprepared. He had been standing in the middle of a small clearing, looking up at the sky when the attack started. Something struck him a heavy blow on his mid-section propelling him nearly 10ft backwards onto a tree trunk. He slid down and came to a rest on the cold ground. Acting on instinct he rolled himself sideways still down. The tree with which he had collided shattered apart explosively. Michael thanked his instincts. As a fighter his instincts had always been excellent. He listened to it now. Pushing himself back onto his feet, he headed for the tree-line. He took a running jump to catch onto a low branch, using the strength of his arms to propel himself upwards. Before he could jump to another one the branch was sliced off leaving Michael to fall to the ground.

'Fucking finally...' thought Michael.

He turned the fall into a roll. Grabbing the sliced off branch while getting upright on one knee, He whipped the branch in a smooth sideways motion to his right. It struck something obviously soft and alive. He was able to look at his attacker properly for the first time since the attack had begun. What Michael saw made his mouth fell open in surprise: 'You are a girl!'

He wasn't prepared for how beautiful she was. Her clothes accentuated her figure. It was both hard and soft at the same time. She was petite; certainly not more than 5'3.Her breasts looked like a D. She had feminine curves underneath all her muscle. She had a runners physique. Her eyes were what caught Michael's attention. It was the most vivid leaf green he had ever seen.

'I will never submit to you! NEVER!'

The last words said in a shout seemed to whip around the clearing and generate a slight wind, which briefly sent leaves fluttering into the air. She got upright and Michael saw her weapon for the first time. She held a beautifully engraved scimitar in her left hand. The steel glittered brightly in the light from the stars. She swept forward. The sword blurring into a web of steel. He avoided the blade by moving backwards and sideways in the same motion. The sword missed him by a whisker slicing off a lock of his hair. Michael retaliated with two sharp blows; both accurate and powerful despite being placed in the dark with Michael only guessing as to his attackers position. The first hit on her left wrist disarmed her, making the girl drop the scimitar. The second hit was a powerful jab on the stomach. He felt a pang of regret at her pained oof. But he pushed his advantage forward. He whipped the branch upward and sideways in a single motion striking a blow on her right cheek. He couldn't help feeling a slight pang of remorse at the bruise that formed on her cheek. He felt even worse at her reaction. She used her right hand to cover the bruise and then burst into tears. Michael had just opened his mouth to ask if she was alright when the girl yelled out again.

'Never! Never! Never! Never!'

A dust devil picked up at her words, whipping up dried leaves and dust from the forest floor. When everything settled down once more the girl had disappeared. He started to look for the fallen scimitar only to see that it too had disappeared. Michael sat down right where he had been standing, to try and figure out what had happened.He was also more than a bit winded. A movement in the trees to his right alerted him. Deciding that sticking around would be a particularly stupid decision on his part, Michael headed for the tree line once more towards the direction of the hiking trail.

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
First time

I have been here for a while. And I have read lots of good and bad stuff in nearly all genres. It's the first time I read something so good that I had to comment about it. You have hit an excellent start. Well, I have seen some starts as near as good, but not equal but for some reasons or another the writers didn't continue with their story. I hope you are not one of those. Keep going, keep with your story.

My advice, because you are posting your writing on Literotica, you will be expected to have sex scenes. Just ignore that, let the story flow and if it happened to be sex scenes in it so it's good. If not, don't try to force it.

Your friend,

Lonely Wolf

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
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Very god keep itup cant wait for the next chapter

TJSkywindTJSkywindover 9 years ago
A lot of questions

The story draws one in.

Impression that magic is part of this world. And, that Michael has extra abilities above the norm. It has been pointed out that he was able to defeat a skilled swordswoman while unarmed, and hit a tree hard enough to cause it to explode yet suffered no damage himself. The blade could be enchanted (explaining the ability to slice through branches). Nothing prior to help explain that this is not Smalltown in rural USA.

But no explanation about why this woman / fay? angrily attacks with the goal of killing or discouraging him from "taking her" or forcing her submission? Ah, and I just saw the tags. So she's a djinn?

Either Kevin did something that was a real humdinger or Michael likes pounding on people. Your task is to clue us in.

Potential there. A lot of questions to answer; answer a few and get readers coming back for more. But writing more than a couple of pages would be good. Remember, Lit's pages are really long; this submission isn't even a full Lit page.

angelicbeautyangelicbeautyover 9 years ago

Good start. . But too short. Can't wait to read morr

BigDog167BigDog167over 9 years ago
I agree!

A very good start, if short and I am looking forward to reading more.

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