That weekend marked a the beginning of a new direction of my life. My life had changed in that wild week that started with me meeting Kelly on the stairs. I made mistakes, but the mistakes only revealed a greater benefit. I wish I could say that was true of all my mistakes. I had some more to make, but that's a different chapter.
Author's Note: This ends the first part of The Designer series. I'm greatly appreciative of all the comments, and votes. It's encouraged me to continue the series. I have some great ideas for the next series to explore how Jeremiah learns the relationships aren't always so easy when one of the the members can't control minds.
Thanks to sportychica334 for all her help in editing and encouragement to continue writing. Thanks to beta readers Karenas and Emily124 for offering suggestions and critiques.
I hope the next part will kick off in a couple of weeks to a month. So be looking for it.
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Beautiful
This is really cute and lovely. I love the fact that the narrator has a high moral standard, that he is not using these girls for his own enjoyment like some kind of prick. He has obviously issues about his actions, his suggestions, his mind control of the girls and doesn't want to hurt them.more...
Enjoyable
Enjoyed reading this story. You seem to take your time in order to make the story and characters right. I have missed that in a lot of stories and author's here at this site. The storyline feels right with a natural flow to it, and you don't go over the top like many other's do. Looking forward to more chapters from you.more...
Love the feedback.
I realize I set a pretty high bar in that first paragraph. So I have a ways to go to get their. Clients aren't necessarily famous, just rich enough to pay the fee.
The next part sets Jeremiah on the path to helping create relationships, the service says, "designs girlfriends" but that's a rather limited view of what he does.
Thank you for the comments, I'm glad all of you are paying attention. As a writer, your questions mean that you're asking the questions I'm trying to answer. That is priceless.
Thanks.more...
Echoing The other comment
I also wonder how Jeremiah gets to the point where he is doing it for a living. Given his issues with possible abuse, it seems an odd outcome.
But I have loved the story so far.
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I will be looking forward to chapter 2
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