- Non-Erotic Poetry
- forever yours
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Click hereEntrapped
like twisted mangroves
tangled amid the swamps
of the everglade marsh
~*~
Weaved
into the vision of a
predator's web of pleasure
looming from a maestro's harp
~*~
Embedded
in a garden of budding roses
with thorns to capture the
butterfly in filaments of forever more
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 16 years agoThis poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>
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LeBrozabout 16 years agoI've got to go with Ange on "woven" instead of "weaved". It sounds better. The tone of the poem, however, seems rather foreboding, despite the hint of promise in the title.
Angelinealmost 20 years agoif it's happy or sad in tone--it's well written! My only nitpick (and it truly is a nitpick) is the use of "weaved." I know you were going for parallel construction of the verbs that begin each strophe, but I think "Woven," while not strictly parallel with the other two verbs, makes for a smoother read. Either way, it's good stuff. :)
Tathagataalmost 20 years agoas always
And perhaps you were talking about belonging to nature itself?
or vice versa
A lovely read
Thank you
