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Click hereWell,
now I know,
that to love
you must live
as if one or the other
is nothing but a slip
from typing too fast
on neighbouring keys.
Maybe just stumbling,
a motoric mishap
form an occupied mind,
so hellbent to love,
(or was it to live)?
Whichever distraction
disturbing enough
to slip on the keys
I now know
well.
I love you.
I live you.
No difference.
Both I do.
I love this kind of poem--it's philosophical but simply stated so that it doesn't overwhelm--and it shouldn't because it endorses a basic but critical (at least to me) way of looking at the world. In the last line, I think you could get away without "Both." Just my opinion, but just saying "I do" would end the poem sufficiently--that "Both" sounds a bit awkward to my ear, but maybe it's just me. It's really a wonderful poem. :)
Well YDD, yes. It's semi intentional. I intended from first, but typed form, and decided to leave it in. But perhaps the line would had worked better with an added adverb.
TY all for the comments.
love/live,
-Lin
Most novel, refreshing, and well done.
Just one question,
Did you mean "form",
or were you typing too fast again?
It takes a poet to not just hit backspace, but to notice, reflect, and draw so much semantic and emotional insight from so little a slip. Bravo!
I thought this was going to take a different direction when I read the title. I like the way you handled it.
Have you come across the embarrassing lover/liver typo? ;)