- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Stone
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- A letter home from prison
Like two hearts
waiting to be
freed from stone
etched by some sculptor's hand
we stand
apart
yet are one
- A letter home from prison
Like two hearts
waiting to be
freed from stone
etched by some sculptor's hand
we stand
apart
yet are one
and the stone
breathes
and the stone
breathes
- COMMENTS
tungtied2uover 19 years agosort of like when a famous person farts, and everyone tries to figue out what you been eating from it....
I like the version you wanted posted... solid, captive, yet the promise of life. Funny how an error can bring so much comment.....ain't this place grand?
twelveooneover 19 years agowhat some of the commenters observed, may be worthwhile pursueing, as a thought, maybe some trimming in the first, a little more fleshing out in the second, I kind of agree the stones breathing may be a little two much.
WickedEveover 19 years agoI thought the two letters were on purpose. It gives the poem an intense longing.
Tathagataover 19 years agoall of them.
~and the stone breathes~
may be " sappy, but it, or it's equivalent, is needed to close the poem.
In my opinion,
: )
even having it repeated twice was a nice touch
A fortuitous accident indeed
nice work
SeattleRainover 19 years agoI love your prison poems, and this is no exception. I enjoyed both versions actually, I thought the first was the letter, and the second was maybe the receiver turning the letter into a poem (which is a cool idea for a poem now I think about it...)
