Raymond Chandler Scrubbing the Tub

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I get down on my hands and knees
like a whore on Sunset
after the price has been agreed on.

I put my brush down and try to scrub
the yellow of an old man’s teeth off the porcelain.
It’s a debt that isn’t easy to pay and I curse
myself for not doing this last week.

Non-slip shower flowers are always in bloom,
must be the all the rain they get.
The only pollen they produce is
a bunch of tiny black bits of leftover
soap and grime and skin and God only knows what else.

Despite the constant motion the brush looks
about as bored as I am.
It decides to take a break by kicking a piece
of foam up into my eye.

A string of profanities leave my mouth as
I stumble to my feet and towards the sink.
A quick look in the mirror and I see Popeye
looking back. I splash some water into my face.

Despite the pain, I get back down on my hands and knees
again, like the whore on Sunset, I finish the job.

I rinse out the tub with the shower. It looks
a little better. The wife comes in and looks up
and down like a mortician examining a corpse.

“You missed a spot”
She walks out the door.

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irishcatsmeowirishcatsmeowover 19 years ago
Will remember this

each time i clean the tub. Thanks for a great memory...will make the job a little less tedious.

jd4georgejd4georgeover 19 years ago
This is great fun!

I've been the same whore on far too many Saturday mornings! Just wondering what it would be like to be a bit more aggressive with Popeye... (such a wonderful image)... with something like "I kicked some water in his face".

Thanks for the chuckles!

PatCarringtonPatCarringtonover 19 years ago
well put together.

this was interesting reading / and quite enjoyable / i think you have an extra word in 'must be the all the rain they get' /

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
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Very descriptive with imaginative simile, like this:

I put my brush down and try to scrub

the yellow of an old man?s teeth off the porcelain.

Great job

TathagataTathagataover 19 years ago
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I laughed out loud and loved the description of the whore too.

Excellent piece.

Shows how the everyday is a poem waiting to be born

Thank you

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