- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Toxic Love: Bridge
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She stood me upon the bridge while below me
the shine of dark water on rocks was like oil was like
shadows of insects in ink was like what? was like
shine of her love it was crawling like words she said
I love you
I couldn't
couldn't
I couldn't look.
Oh no don't be afraid baby love's like a
Moment in space it's like flying like falling it's
Like nothing, then tis over and over forever and she reached
Held my chin took my eyes made me look
Darling no! God it's nothing
No bottom no river no. ever. no. never.
no.
bridge
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 16 years agoI like the format of this work because the meaning of the words (and lack of punctuation, ect) allow multiple responses from the reader.....both from the readers and the authors point of view. I like poems not bound by tradition. My response to the poem is that toxic love (dirty damaging oil slick)can never be a bridge to something better....true love? Worse yet, maybe true love doesn't exist. Leighlilly
WickedEveover 16 years agoI'm a little undecided about parts of the poem, but nothing that keeps me from truly enjoying what I just read. This part is fantastic: was like oil was like shadows of insects in ink was like what?
wildsweetoneover 16 years agoi mentioned this submission in the New Poem Review thread in the Poetry Forum. please feel free to come along and join in with other poets. the 50% temperature rating is given so that it does not alter future temperature ratings. - wildsweetone
GuiltyPleasureover 16 years agoThe line breaks in this poem make it an interesting read. The inconsistent use of lower/upper case is a bit distracting but over all I enjoyed this. Love hurts, particularly the toxic kind.
Tess
