Ode to a tattoo

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What is that light?
Is it the sun shining
on my true love's breast?
I love to watch the rising
and setting as she breathes

Such a bosom cannot help
but brighten one's day
see the rays spreading
across such succulent flesh
enlightening and inviting

I am forced to acquiesce
dig into the bodice
of her dress and free
her golden orbs, drink
in their wondrous beauty

on this eve of my undoing
I will not be distracted
but act on impulse, wait
for sunset, when in twilight
I might rise to the occasion

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Syndra LynnSyndra Lynnalmost 16 years ago
tat to you...

i love golden orbs. :) nice poem.

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 16 years ago
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har, har, Golden Orbs, Eve if you have to do Golden Orbs, it is a bright shining day with the sun, blah, blah, I think he is parrelling here - Kudos on the dreadful Golden Orbs in this case. Just my humble opinion - from a most humble non winner of the most covetous awards and the most covetous, blah, blah. You may want to rethink wondrous beauty. Bread can be wondrous, but I'm just loafing around.

KOLKOREKOLKOREabout 16 years ago
Very sensual,

Your description made me rethink my bias (ok, I am old fashioned) against meddling with the human body. Perhaps one little sun is ok...

WickedEveWickedEveabout 16 years ago
good ode

The second half of the poem is a bit better than the first two stanzas. The only thing I'd rethink would be "golden orbs" unless you're writing about someone tanned or a golden figure, perhaps. Um, no, I'd still think the golden orbs. Wish I had a good suggetion for an alternative.

LeBrozLeBrozabout 16 years ago
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