- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Word weaver
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Silly snake in a basket
unaware of the world outside
awaits, in the dark for the sounds
which wrap around his psyche
stir responses primal and forgotten
command him to uncoil,
rise to attention, sway back and forth
entranced in a dance of utter abandon
he understands not the charmer
or how his armor ages old is pierced
so simply, merely by sound and rhythm
which calls to him, submit yourself
loose your skin, come forward
you will be rewarded, let go
and you will find who you are
- COMMENTS
unpredictablebijoualmost 16 years agoI like the way you begin with an image and then bring the focus in, and eventually turn the camera toward the reader. "Advice" poems are dangerous, because they can make a reader defensive, but this one gets in under the skin, as it were. Excellent work.
champagne1982almost 16 years agoWhat a charmer you are. Snakes, women, poetry... lovely. The hissy sibilance portrays your cobra beautifully. This poem is mentioned in the New Poems Review thread on literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.
KOLKOREalmost 16 years agoAre you trying to plant a snake specific phobia into my crumbling mind, or worse make it a complex case of a word and snake phobia combined? I never thought about creative writing quite that way (and perhaps will never think of it the same way again..). Ideally I would have liked to see the 'words' theme weaved into the poem itself, rather than staying in the title. Still, it was an intriguing image.
