- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Might Be Mesuline
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Click hereamongst the nets and winches
whorey bearded fishermen
and Christmas bauble floats
caught in the net, not a corpse but smiling
a siren in shades of the sea
with gill slits
such a shock beneath breasts
and she sings!
sings!
till the fishermen explode from their own needy heat
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 13 years ago100, pleads mouse trouble, lost first comment. Question of the formatting
greenmountaineerover 13 years agoI liked this poem very much. It took me in many directions, including Google like chipbutty. I always like legend as metaphor, and provided a poem is written well enough to intrigue my curiosity like this one did, there’s no reason why a reader shouldn’t toggle over to Google or Wikipedia. Then the fun begins. Re-read the poem, re-read the article, re-read the poem, play with the possibilities, but the poem itself has to initiate that for me. This one did that superbly.
Mermaids and sailors; there’s always a sexual overtone to that . (Hope they didn’t explode with each other. LOL) “Whorey bearded,” however, didn’t work for me. Maybe it’s a guy thing; don’t know for sure.
buttersover 13 years agoreally enjoyed the conjuring up of this creature caught in nets but still singing.. almost a who's trapped whom situation and her effect on the 'whorey bearded fishermen' *nods*
i'm not sure the layout adds anything, though, V... has it come out as it meant to?
