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would

What would I say
if I could press my lips
to yours
as you slept
and whisper
my secret?
How would I trespass
your dreams
with my words?
Betray my need
while your sleep
safeguards
my heart?

you

And would you,
as I slept,
confess yourself
to me?
Breathe life into
this sacred
almost?
Murmur truths my
unawakened heart
cannot yet bring itself
to hear?
Would your artless vow
be what gives
me faith?

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demure101demure101over 11 years ago
Lovely!

I do understand what Desejo means, but to me the two single words lead up to the first line of the second stanza as a kind of link...

A question without an answer, of course - if only...

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
NO ANSWERS TO SLEEPING QUESTIONS

leaving doubt and remorse. TK U MLJ LV NV

DesejoDesejoover 11 years ago
Some wonderful lines here

However, I don't understand the single word lines (would, you). For me, they detract from the poem. Interested to hear what others think - and maybe what you were thinking with the structure.

Scheherazade73Scheherazade73over 11 years agoAuthor

Thanks, Harry... Every once in awhile a gem hits me :)

HarryHillHarryHillover 11 years ago
Artless vow........!!!!!!!!!!

no guile...no making the words pretty ..simple truth?

wonderful phrase.