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Click here(For Peter)
A caramel-filled confection in her fingers,
she was an exotic bloom
among the pale lilies
with her copper-colored skin
and delicious curves.
He wondered
what her naked body would look like
in the moonlight.
He could see,
so clearly,
the passion she held inside her
like a beacon.
Savoring the mellow flavor on his tongue,
he felt the sharpness of her regard
like a scalpel on flesh.
She pierced him
with her bright-eyed stare.
His blue eyes were blazing,
and yet so dark
they were almost purple.
He wanted to whimper
and roar
at the same time,
passion welling in his chest.
© 2013
I love the way you use the sweet taste of the confectionary, and mix it with hers.
and a husky voice... The poet's one and yours :)
Love this one (as you know)
good lead in lines,
a good rule of thumb
avoid the word "passion" like the plague, generally leads to dumbness
if this case not fatal, just not good
Overlaod? typo?
The rest of it sustains a good read.