Sensual Overlaod

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DawnJ
DawnJ
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(For Peter)

A caramel-filled confection in her fingers,
she was an exotic bloom 
among the pale lilies
with her copper-colored skin
and delicious curves.
He wondered
what her naked body would look like
in the moonlight.
He could see,
so clearly,
the passion she held inside her
like a beacon.

Savoring the mellow flavor on his tongue,
he felt the sharpness of her regard
like a scalpel on flesh.
She pierced him
with her bright-eyed stare.
His blue eyes were blazing,
and yet so dark
they were almost purple.
He wanted to whimper
and roar
at the same time,
passion welling in his chest.

© 2013

DawnJ
DawnJ
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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Hmmm....

Fingerlicking good and brilliant as the dawn!

Peter

demure101demure101almost 11 years ago
Good images -

I love the way you use the sweet taste of the confectionary, and mix it with hers.

demure101demure101almost 11 years ago
A bright smile

and a husky voice... The poet's one and yours :)

Love this one (as you know)

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 11 years ago
5ed

good lead in lines,

a good rule of thumb

avoid the word "passion" like the plague, generally leads to dumbness

if this case not fatal, just not good

Overlaod? typo?

The rest of it sustains a good read.