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Nothing is unwritten. Every moment is carved
In cut stone. What stranger brushes the crowd
Unseen, unnamed, atomic--
Your future lover, nemesis, anonymous
Now but pulsing through space
On orbit to smack you some dark day,
Your delicious snowball of doom?

So go, solitary one, and spin
Through your space, lone and dim.
Untraced, I streak the stars
In inimitable ovals, glitter-sprung
Darkling frost. Seasons wing
Us on, and, sure-set,
The hour must come when we'll-- splat!

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buttersbuttersalmost 10 years ago
oh i really llike this

a delicious pulse of sibilance throughout, like the swish of nanoseconds being brushed aside till the inevitable impact

so much going on with the phrasing it was a delight for me to read. thankyou.

in inimitable ovals, glitter-sprung

very nice

todski28todski28almost 10 years ago
interesting

I had to reference back to the title

delicious snowball of doom, definitely caught my attention,

didn't like the ending, but it does tie in with snowball, solid write,

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 10 years ago
very well

well done

good phrasing, word choice

Unseen, unnamed, atomic--

Your future lover, nemesis, anonymous

ending is a little too (anti?)climatic?

5ed