All Comments on 'Careful When Pushing For IR'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Poor writing

You should hire an editor before posting more stories.

cindylynn34cindylynn34over 9 years ago
gave a five

I expect next part to have more juice , less hurried and edited , I hope

DadnhubbyforIRDadnhubbyforIRover 9 years agoAuthor
sorry

Not the greatest at this sorry, and why would i hire anyone to edit this? just sharing my story for horny people who like

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
re: Poor writing

No, learn basic English. I don't expect professional level writing, but I do expect some evidence the poster (can't really call it a writer) passed grammar school English. None of that exists in this mess with the run-on sentences, shitty punctuation, non-existent sentence structure, phrases that just don't make sense (she put on the porn bulls hammering white trophy wife's just like her.), etc.

gordo12gordo12over 9 years ago
Written by another convenience store clerk

Living in his mother's basement.

Get a life! 0*

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Virtually unreadable.

This stream of conciousness is so disjointed that you need a ghostwriter, not an editor. You have a basic theme, i.e. You want your wife to go black. Beyond that, you have nothing but a page of pseudo random words completely divorced from coherent thought or sentence structure.

DadnhubbyforIRDadnhubbyforIRover 9 years agoAuthor
Gordo12

Wow bud that was a really bad insult good thing I don't let angry virgins get me down, i knew guys like you in High school you may be smarter and have better grammar but you're the loser here, go get laid pal it will change your life

DadnhubbyforIRDadnhubbyforIRover 9 years agoAuthor
I don't care

I was easily one of the worse students in my school besides math of course, dumb jock who's glory days were in HS is what you all think, but owning my own business and being semi wealthy as an adult are the glory days here!!! wait till the next story i am gonna bunch the words up so bad just to watch you spelling bee champs get all angry lol

DadnhubbyforIRDadnhubbyforIRover 9 years agoAuthor
Anonymous

you guys come on here to jack off to stories of situations you'll never be in so just shut up, unless you are a pro writer i am willing to bet you make zero dollars off of your perfect sentence structure lol

crickettecricketteabout 9 years ago
Had me confused

Need to slow down and expand on each sentence instead of running them all together. I like the subject but did not care for the way you presented it. And No, I did not come in here to "jack off" but to enjoy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
dumbass

What a waste of time. I want my fucking money back

bonnietaylor2bonnietaylor2over 8 years ago
5 for effort and content and of course

because asshole annony hates it. If he she it...IT hates a story it must be really good!!

WhitewifeneedsbbcWhitewifeneedsbbcover 8 years ago
Spelling and grammar lol

Who gives a shit about spelling full stops and stuff the story was good and I need to read part two it's a good start hope you don't disappoint with part two keep up the great work @dad&hubby4ir

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Can't wait

I can't wait for the next installment

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
Poorly Written

I can't wait for you to learn how to spell and construct a cohesive sentence.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
inconsistencies, get your story straight

The math is a mess. He is 25 and she 20 when they meet. He is 41 now, she has a daughter 17 years old, which would make her 38 at the youngest. At least two years vanished.

I suggest a little better build up too.

syn4321syn4321about 1 year ago

Still waiting for part 2 after 8 years... You promised us.... Liar?

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