All Comments on 'Trinity'

by Vysis

Sort by:
  • 22 Comments
TerrytheTravelerTerrytheTravelerabout 9 years ago
Well done

Two very likeable characters. I hope to hear lots more from them. I didn't trip over any errors and I appreciate that too,

ChrispeChrispeabout 9 years ago
Very, very good.

Thank you for a great story and I do hope you will continue.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Great

Nice story hope there a part 2

tabbymidnitetabbymidniteabout 9 years ago
very enjoable hot wet read

Loved reading about Trinity and her Sugar daddy... They need each other and they don't even realize how much yet.... Thank you for sharing this tale. I also found it to make me very wet. I just kept reading and really got into the story line. 5 Stars is a definite

AverageBearAverageBearabout 9 years ago
Wonderfully written - great job!

You've created some very believable and interesting characters. The dialogue and action are well-written and well-paced. The story is highly charged with eroticism, mixed with appropriate elements of caution and angst. I was drawn into your story to the point of forgetting that it was just a story. That's the mark of an excellent tale!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
More please

It's an excellent, sweet, touching story. Please write more and please give it a happy ending. There are far too few of those in the world. In here it can happen.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
NICE STORY AND GREAT ENDING

This Story Has An Ending - At Trinity and beyond. Truly a story that could be an actual experience.

Kookaburra8Kookaburra8almost 9 years ago
Loved it

Brilliant story can't wait to see if you do a sequel

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Loving pair

I like dogs too but their owners are even better. But I have never met any like Trinity and Butch yet.

His compassion for the dog turned into guardianship for the girl. She has a lot to give and has found someone she can trust who is willing to give without demanding recompense.

I feel elated for her.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Please write more!

You are a brilliant writer. Your story is not only erotic but very touching as well. Full of mixed emotion for a very wet and horny girl at 2.36am. Thank you! May them lived happily ever after!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Well Written and enjoyable

A nice romantic interlude with fun for both parties.

I hope you will consider following up on Carl and Trinity.

Ramjet

ruffnreddy69ruffnreddy69almost 8 years ago
GREAT Story!! Better start of a series!

This was one of the best written mature stories here.

Nicely done, please keep the story going!

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Nice

Just a nice saving the fair maiden story. Wish you would do more chapters for it.

5 Stars.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
too fast a jump

the story was good and well written but when you jumped to the shower scene the anal part was way too fast considering many women in real life don't do it....slow down.. remember you did this all in one day.....

seabee

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Excellent story

Oh yes, I join everyone in saying this was excellent. Also PLEASE continue the story a little. Just enough to get her stop saying "Sugar Daddy!" IF I were lucky enough to rescue someone from rough patch in their life and to have her call me sugar daddy, I don't think I'd care for it. But, after all, it is your story and you can do whatever you want with it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
nice!

well done! not the usual load of doo doo

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Really nice...

Well done.

PapaGolf414PapaGolf414over 3 years ago
Excellent, Just Excellent

Really enjoyed your story, about what a world should really be like. This is only the second of your stories that I have read, but I will certainly be reading more! Thanx for the Read!

DickStiffDickStiffalmost 3 years ago

Loved the story, when you think this was all in one day, some of it was a bit quick off the mark, I kept expecting the cop to come back and catch them at it. Five stars from me.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

I am a 81yo widow lady who has been a avid reader of romance novels for my entire life. Mostly Harlequins, but others, too. I love them all. I found and started reading Literotica a few months ago and have mostly enjoyed it. I like the colorful language, although it can become overly explicit for my tastes. However, your work is really perfectly balanced, and the love in your characters is so incredibly sweet and real and warm and thrilling, and itinspires your readers to not only seek and find true love and true ROMANCE in their lives, but also to be better people, better friends, and more giving to their fellow inhabitants here on the third rock from the sun. Thank you for yourextraordinary writing, and please PLEASE favor us all with more of it. Elsie Keltner

Ilovetophoto68Ilovetophoto68over 1 year ago

Great story. Write more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Ending was fairly abrupt. The whole anal thing was a bit too much too soon for a just deflowered virgin. 4*

Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Post as:
Anonymous
userVysis@Vysis
776 Followers
I have an active imagination but very little free time! I have at least a half dozen works in progress at any particular time and few more ideas that are only that. With a PhD in science, I do a lot of technical writing, but really enjoy getting my fiction on when I can find a...