All Comments on 'Lovebird's Ch. 01'

i liked the story line, it just wasn't well written

IT IS NOT LAY .IT IS LIE.YOU ARE NOT ALONE FOR 99% OF AMERICANS ON HERE GET THEM WRONG

tiny little flash story that is stilted.

Continue... I would like

I see this story was written back in 03, 17 years ago. I read this because of the writer that wrote 'Nothing Between Us' which was really great.

I'm sure your stories have much improved since this one was written. I found it to be a bit 'choppy' and the premise is ok but the way the story moved from just friends to 'just' sex was a bit much. No love or romance or talk, in other words 'foreplay'.

You must have been very young back then. I will have to read one of your more recent stories, Thanks for writing.

Wow! It’s like this author has never had sex. Sentence structure and word usage reveals a very young author.

The concept is great but the believability factor is too low even for fantasy.

Hopefully as time and experience go on you’ll improve. No one runs before they walk, but you had the guts to start.

Bill S.

COMMENTED ON 13TH OCTOBER 2022!

AFTER ALMOST 22 YEARS SINCE THE STORY WAS WRITTEN!

WELL, I NORMALLY DON'T GO BY NUMBERS... IN 22 YEARS THIS STORY HAS GOT:

1. 3.53 * RATING

2. 50.2 K READERSHIP

3. 4 ❤️

4. 5 COMMENTS

NOTHING GREAT.

WHAT CAUGHT MY FANCY WAS... ATLEAST THREE WRITERS WERE INSPIRED TO WRITE THEIR STORY AFTER READING THIS ONE.

THAT MEANS SOMETHING SPECIAL.

I LIKED THE THEME OF THE STORY.

EVEN THE NOMENCLATURE.

BOTH COMPLEMENTING EACH OTHER.