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Mallika On The Sets Of Khawish

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by Anonymous08/21/08

Good premise, badly done

The basic story premise was good.

But the story was not well-written at all. No character development, hardly any time spent on descriptions... overall like a hurried attempt to get the storyline out there... and that's all it really was -- a storyline. Not an actual story.

- JT

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