All Comments on 'Innocent Pawn Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 20 years ago
Great story!

Wishful, I loved it! You are an awesome writer and that story was a superb reflection of your talent. You handled that story line with a competence indicative of somebody with much more experience at writing than yourself. Not only that, it turned me on, big time! Count me as your newest fan.

Lou

Sir_NathanSir_Nathanalmost 20 years ago
I love this site...

Every now and again one comes across real gems, though they may be written a while ago, I am pleased to have found this one...

Nathan

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
A complete turn on!

This is simply amazing stuff. I stumbled on this website recently and this is one of the first stories i read. Have not masturbated so successfully alone before!!! Cant wait to read the next in the series...

msboy8msboy8about 19 years ago
Incredible!

The beginning of a saucy, intelligent series. Very erotic and very well written! Bravo!

msboy8msboy8about 19 years ago
Incredible!

The beginning of a saucy, intelligent series. Very erotic and very well written! Bravo!

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Wonderful!

Oh my God. This is a trully wonderful series! Magnificent!

hotqueenof.fantasieshotqueenof.fantasiesover 18 years ago
WOW

WOW that was hot, can't wait to read the other chapters !!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Amazing

wow, love it

KojoteKojoteover 12 years ago
Well thats ...

... kinda different. Reminds me to those romantic novels in a way. But in a positive way.

It's just the right mixture to spice this theme up and make it very intruiging.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
"You won't find a girl in this damn world who will compare with me."

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uHdNCHomHlU

"And the wind did roar and the wind did moan ...

come take him by his lily white hands and take him by his feet ...

a little bird looked down on Henry Lee ..."

Sorry, i just had to copy and paste something SO BEAUTIFUL

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
I don't care how important "he's" supposed to be,

"you won't find a girl in this damn world who will compare to me."

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uHdNCHomHlU

(i like girls/women to-i don't know what--fight and/or win?

to be heroic--

but i'm not--

i'm shy, and can even faint--ah don't care--

"Lie there, lie there little Henry Lee ..."

This is like "3 Penny Opera" or a related musical "opera"--

the "good, respectable girl" "wins"--

PIRATE JENNY LOSES--

AND SHE WINS AND IS THE HERO

and i'd die for her

(just kiddin of course

but i would

of course

cause she's ma muse)

*it IS interesting that SHE's the HERO, and SHE LOSES THE GUY--

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
I would die for Pirate Jenny.

Disapproving Rabbit: 'Nuff said.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
P. I. would understand.

P. I. would understand.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
This is just incorrect about female sexuality--

"Have you ever touched yourself here?"

"Stop," she gasped, her hands gripping the edge of the desk as he circled that sensitive flesh.

"Have you?" he demanded, flicking the throbbing nub.

"No, it's a sin," she cried as her treacherous body stirred against the sensations his touch wrought."

Females masturbate in all kinds of ways. And not all directly touch their genitals.

This isn't from "shame" or "guilt," or whatever. That's just not what they learned was most pleasurable.

It's sexist to even attempt to try to make females fit into a mold of sexuality as males apparently fit into and are willing and unashamed to fit into.

Booooooooooooooooooooooooring

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Now i've gotten into this topic--

as far as masturbation goes, my thigh squeezing is the best (for me)--W. Packard via writing tried to get me to do it "by hand," as in "Great Expectorations."

I did it. And it wasn't as good. By a long shot. It felt like all the sensations were--on the top--just in that one place. With MY METHOD--it's everywhere. All over the place. Including your vagina--if you are blessed enough to be female. I mean you have vaginal contractions.

And this fit perfectly with--stuff with guys--

BUT I DID DISCOVER THAT IF A GUY DOES WHAT SOME WOMEN DO FOR MASTURBATION--IT FEELS GREAT. But it doesn't feel the same if i try it. Really. But i've got me method, so that doesn't matter.

Maybe it's being "dominated" by someone else's fingers?

Whatever--

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TqhOVY58zIo

--why are all the women weeping?

not moi

AMHJ89AMHJ89about 10 years ago

She should've resisted longer

KingOfCupsKingOfCupsover 9 years ago
Congratulations

Hallo! Even if your english language is more difficult for me, you have been able to make me fall in the scene. congratulations

spiritedsoulspiritedsoulover 9 years ago
Wonderfully written please continue!

Do not worry about the negative comments, they obviously have no imagination.

You have done very well and brought me along with you every step of the way. Bravo!

maddictmaddictabout 9 years ago
Sorry mademoiselle,

Life can be very unfair, as it appears to be the case here. Shere khan told his innocent pawn, " why don't you run, it will make it more interesting for me, at least."

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
What's with the child-women fettish?

Why would a tall female author have a heroine who is barely more than child sized? This takes it way too close to pedo. Well written but not erotic, well not for me anyway.

PardonmyfallPardonmyfallalmost 8 years ago
Well written!

Ignore the other comments about your character being a short female.

Being a tall female, I generally write in short characters to imagine how things may differ if genes were not what they are.

Please keep writing!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Well written

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