All Comments on 'Dr. Jane'

only a guy with a pen name like bones malone could write lesbian sex this purile.

My story may be "purile" (or puerile as it were), but I don't think it's all that bad. Yes, I'm male, and yes, I'm young, so I'm sorry if I didn't capture lesbian sex perfectly. I think most people thought the story was just fine.

This story was awesome. I enjoyed it. If it only it were longer! Wow! I would love to see you write more to this story! Great work!

this was a great short story, with a professional level of writing, unlike many submissions in here. Yes, it would be stellar if it was say, twice as long. Dont write a novel, but make it longer. and maybe a little more description of tongue work and more sexual positions. Read some other stories, and get ideas from them. Excellent, excellent work. Can't wait to see more.

A bit far fetched

Wow, I have never gotten off so hot in my life, I could feel her lips on my clit as I read, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more to this one!

I thought this was pretty good as they say honesty is the best policy