All Comments on 'Public Spirited Ch. 02'

You do a wonderful job of building up to "The Big Scene" and then seem to fall flat, as if you've grown bored or don't actually know HOW to write the sexual encounter. Stories here CAN be longer than 750 words or one page, you know! Heck, I probably could have gone on for a good two more pages just describing the sexual climax!

Spend more time on your endings, friend, and you will go from being a "good" writer here to a great one.