All Comments on 'The Fine'

by charms75

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Nicely done

Your story is well-written and has a nice warm touch at the end. You could have made the story "edgier" by making the policewoman more dominant sexually. She is, after all, bigger and stronger than he is. On the other hand, you could have made her more vulnerable by bringing out her personal conflict (need for sex vs. not wanting to be labeled a slut) earlier.

All in all, a good effort.

rahulranbirrahulranbirabout 17 years ago
Fine leads to reward

Very good story, keep writing.

angel228angel228about 15 years ago
Wow! Great Ending

Having erotica with some real storyline is really good. Nicely done!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
hair

You haven't mentioned about her armpit hair and pubic hair

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