All Comments on 'Quads Ch. 02'

makes me wish i had a sister and brother and sister and brother, definitely hot!!

Yes you should keep this story going with the parents getting involved too.

A good second installment. You've already put down some foreshadowing as far as getting the parents involved, so I'd guess that you've already made your decision in that regard. For the record, however, I do indeed think that the parents should get involved in SOME way. Just try not to get too cliche'd with it, please- secret incest society, long-running history of it in the family, mom and dad are also brother-sister... those kinds of things are cliches (I note, also, that I've been guilty of using such a cliche in a story like this... and while it worked, it also felt like a cop-out). Check out "And the Children Shall Lead Them" for an interesting way to get the parents involved. *Drawing* the parents into the situation gives it more dramatic flavor and intrigue as opposed to just making them "magically" willing and ready.

Please try to pay attention to typos- there's quite a number of them in both the first and second installments. Typos invariably break up the flow and should be avoided whenever possible.

Keep going!

I agree you have to keep it going with the parents getting in bed with them.

GREAT STORY HOPE YOU BRING THE PARENTS IN THE NEXT STORY. I HOPE YOU CONTINUE WITH AT LEAST 6 MORE STORIES. I AM SURE THEY MUST HAVE AUNTS OR UNCLES AND OR COUSINS.

RACER24

You have hinted that there was a reason for the large shower but that was to be another story. You have the start to make this a real family story. Looking forward to more chapters. May 2004 be fantastic for you and yours.

Let the parents say "well we see you have found out about the birds and the bees may we join you?" from there there should be endless possiblities of combinations. This is a great story please let it continue. See my story "our Great Family Adventure" Doer

Please contiune the story line.

I'm anxious to read what the parents say :)

The parents should accept the relationship but not join in yet...later the kids could find out that they are the product of an incestous relationship (mom and dad are actually brother and sister).

Wonderfully written, great suspense and build-up to climax (no pun intended). You seem to be an excellent writer and I assume that either you are gifted, or that your full-time job is writing erotic literature, or at least in the literary field. Keep on writing. I look forward to the next installment in (I hope) a long novel,novella. or chain of stories. Excellent foreshadowing and use of pauses. Bravo

Wonderfull. Can we see some babies and all the bits that go with them. Of and definately get the parents involved, brilliant. x

Keep the parents out of it, but keep them supportive of the bond the the Quads have between them.

Take a chance. Get the boys together as well! Break the barrier and see where it takes you.

Great story line!! Please, please, please keep it going. Just wondering what the parents do?? Pregnancys??

I think that "quads" is a great story. Keep writing them. Incest is definately a great topic to read. I personally like to read about when someone accidentaly gets pregnant... so thats just an idea. i look forward to ur next story!

What happens next? I really got into the story. i really want to know how things end. Do their parents get in on it or what? It would be interesting if they did!

its an awsome story and i guess you have to get the parents into it anyway since their there now Also you already kinda set it up for the parents to get into it the shower has 6 heads and the mom suggested them all going to the prom together and they left them alone for the weekend its a set up we all know where you leading the story so just take it there and make it interesting plus you should tripple team the chicks thats awsome

I definately think the parents should get involved in the story. Sexually, I hope. It would reall put pazz in the story. The father doing the girls, too bad they (girls) weren't a little younger. Keep up the good work

...that we're going to learn more about the purpose of the shower, now.

do not get the boys together!!!!

I was just wondering if you did any HP fanfiction writing. I was only asking for your penname of P Dumbledore.

I think u should leave the parents out but perhaps make connection with the boys

This is great reading with all 4 sibling in the act and their love for one another their thrill of changing making it a lot of fun for all.

i wish i had a couple of sisters like you guys.....keep it up if you can...

u made me cum twice in one story

i have a twin sister...and we wish there was another pair of us because of these stories

.. and it's good there was no rape performed by an old and hairy father. I am afraid to read on the next chapters, as I already know where it is getting.

OHG...OMG...OMG

Another hot chapter Can't wait to read more. Yeah I agree with the other poster - no sex with the parents - keep it to the cute sexy siblings.

I think it was a good story and I liked it when I read it .

I liked it better, but it is still lacking the personal feeling that makes your readers feel it too. Makes them desirous to be one of the characters, not just a voyeur of it.

this is fuckin sick what the hell is wrong with people in this world like wtf? seriously omg this story makes me wanna shoot myself

Really, Hades? If you don't like incest, wtf are you doing in this part of literotica? Also, don't talk shit. That's not what comments are for.

This is totally not what it looks like!

please ...we need more........story is great

I think next daddy and mommy should pleasure with the quads

Just WOW. So hot. You painted a great erotic picture with your story.