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by blondbombshelluk
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Anonymousover 20 years agoa nice start but need to tie it together better
your story is good for what it's trying to do ..but it's eradic and not following a flow a way a story should ...feels disjointed ,,,so try some more your other stories speak more on what you like and are use to
Anonymousover 20 years agounusual theme
Found this story somewhat amusing. Unusual thoughts.Got a chuckle out of the last line.
Have to agree with the other comments, somewhat erratic, flow needs improving.
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