All Comments on 'lies in the Knowing'

by RazzRajen

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WickedEveWickedEveabout 20 years ago
good

This is good, Razz. It appeals to me much more than any of yours that I've had an opportunity to read lately. It's more focused and you get the message across in fewer words.

I would make a small edit with skinscapes. It needs to be softer. Perhaps, fleshscapes or something similar.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 20 years ago
Seconded!

I agree completely with WE!(Which I often do.) Even down to "skinscapes", but I don't like her substitute any better. I perceive the play with landscape or seascape. If you are going to create a word how about something like "seescapes"? >?(((><

echoes_sechoes_sabout 20 years ago
How about

fleshlit landscapes? Or if you want to add more quivering and glimmering, fleshlit seascapes? Just an idea.

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