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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous02/12/04

damn

I need a cigarette

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by Angeline02/12/04

Well now...

that's a violently sexy little poem you wrote there pal. These sprees of yours together make a book--a good one. You do know that, right?

Ok one nitpick. Might be my ear, but this sounded rhythmically off enough to make me stop reading and say "huh?"--

and wrap your calm
in form of arms
around this man shape
cactus thorny
carelessly horny
overloaded oddity

I'd do this (just a suggestion....)

and wrap your calm
inform of arms
around this man shaped
cactus thorny
careless horny
overloaded oddity

(Note that I did a "Rybka" to "inform" hehe.) Anyway, you know I love these word sprees you skid onto your computer. :)

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by jthserra02/13/04

Love the...

wordplay here... well done.

jim :)

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