Damn man. This makes me happy to be in college! Great story and the twist in the end... Priceless (even more hilarious because I've had it happen to me before). Keep it up and I'll be waiting for a continuation on this.
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Anonymous03/28/04
Well done
Belegon,
OUTSTANDING!! Catches the best and worst of the heady college days that make our memories so great. Love the twist. I think every college grad has had a night like that. May not have ended the same way, but pretty damn close. Keep up the good work. Maybe a picnic story???
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Anonymous03/28/04
A REAL writer!
Great tale, well-written AND: an author who knows how to spell, create meaningful paragraphs and punctuate correctly!
Will wonder never cease? This one's a TEN!
This story is very well written and captures the spirit of college life. I loved the gradual build-up throughout the evening at the bar; it enabled me to get to know the characters better. Keep writing!
Cheers,
Lalenya :^)
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Anonymous03/29/04
The Life of a Wingman...
Excellent story. The build up was just right. I liked how we got to know the characters a little bit before they went wild. Nice little twist of fate too. Been there before. LOL. Keep up the good work.
I usually don't take time to comment on stories because they are usually the same ol' same ol'. Yours however was completely different. It actually had a story line that kept me from skipping to the gory details. The various twists were fun to read and the final one was great. You are a very good writer and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
Juat a note saying your story was well written and a pleasure to read!
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Anonymous03/29/04
I'm giving this a 5!
...not so much for the sex--or rather not JUST for the sex--but for the quality of the writing. Obviously this is a writer who has worked at his craft and enjoys the wordplay as much as his protagonist enjoyed Kris's attitude and edge. Nice work!
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Anonymous04/01/04
Great story!
What else can I say? Very good story line and very well written!
This is a great story. I really felt the pull of the plot along with the turn on of the fucking.
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Anonymous03/23/05
Overall very enjoyable.
I thought this story was well written in general, and had a very good buildup leading to the couple's sexual encounter. I did think the dialog could have had more flow with the rest of the story, or maybe using description intertwined with the dialog to describe the characters' state of mind would have given it more continuity with the rest of the story. The dialog during sex seemed to be a little abrupt given that the rest of the story was so integrated and mellifluous.
Nicely done, Belegon! Of course, I have a particular weakness for the setting, too, but it was extremely well written and well detailed! A pleasure to read in many ways!
When I first ran across the story title, I immediately thought of Tom Cruise and "Top Gun" (yup, aging myself here). I was pleasantly surprised to see that you meant the other definition of "wingman".
Very good story ... very good twist at the end. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
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Anonymous10/09/05
Rock on!
Excellent story. I loved the settings and the descriptions. Great job, keep it up.
What's going on here? Character development in an erotic story? That's unheard of!
I enjoyed this, and it made me laugh more than once.
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Anonymous11/17/08
wow!
this is one out of maybe 3 erotic stories that are the best i have ever read. solid writing, great details, good build-up...all around a superb piece of literotica!
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Anonymous11/17/12
AWESOME!!!!
ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!!!! THE SEX SCENE WAS PERFECT!!! STORY WAS AMAZING!!! BRAVO, GREAT JOB!!!
English
nice
Damn man. This makes me happy to be in college! Great story and the twist in the end... Priceless (even more hilarious because I've had it happen to me before). Keep it up and I'll be waiting for a continuation on this.
Well done
Belegon,
OUTSTANDING!! Catches the best and worst of the heady college days that make our memories so great. Love the twist. I think every college grad has had a night like that. May not have ended the same way, but pretty damn close. Keep up the good work. Maybe a picnic story???
A REAL writer!
Great tale, well-written AND: an author who knows how to spell, create meaningful paragraphs and punctuate correctly!
Will wonder never cease? This one's a TEN!
Great Story!
I love stories where the not so cocky jock is placed in a win win situation. Thanks!
Good Job
Enjoyed your story, realistic and honest. Hope to see more from you soon.
Very nice
Amazingly enjoyable. Good story line, good sex scene, good humor.
Hot hot hot!
Absolutely hot! I love this story, and am adding it to my favorites list...and possibly printing it out.
Wonderfully written, both technically and erotically.
And I had a very mean grin on my face when I read the last line. Poetic justice, anyone?
Very, very wonderful story.
well written
I really enjoyed the story you built. Well written, interesting, building towards a story line. Fun to read. Thanks
Great weekend
Has a nice ring, particularly for the long run. Keep the storyline going.
The long range potential is great.
Impressive...
One of the best-written stories I have read on this board. And believe me, I laughed right along with you at the end! That was a perfect ending!
Well Done!
This story is very well written and captures the spirit of college life. I loved the gradual build-up throughout the evening at the bar; it enabled me to get to know the characters better. Keep writing!
Cheers,
Lalenya :^)
The Life of a Wingman...
Excellent story. The build up was just right. I liked how we got to know the characters a little bit before they went wild. Nice little twist of fate too. Been there before. LOL. Keep up the good work.
Awesome Story
I usually don't take time to comment on stories because they are usually the same ol' same ol'. Yours however was completely different. It actually had a story line that kept me from skipping to the gory details. The various twists were fun to read and the final one was great. You are a very good writer and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
Very erotic, yet real
Juat a note saying your story was well written and a pleasure to read!
I'm giving this a 5!
...not so much for the sex--or rather not JUST for the sex--but for the quality of the writing. Obviously this is a writer who has worked at his craft and enjoys the wordplay as much as his protagonist enjoyed Kris's attitude and edge. Nice work!
Great story!
What else can I say? Very good story line and very well written!
Yum
Love when the 'right' guy comes out on top! Nice mix of sugar and spice! Very yummy.
GREAT STORY
Very well written. Good story and a very nice touch at the end. Glad I read it.
Jason gets shafted
The story was very good. I like the part at the end. Ifelt like I could connect with Will becuase I am usually a wingman also.
This made me smile
No one ever appreciates the wingman. :) I liked the dialogue and nice hot imagery. Good stuff.
MMmmmmm....
I'd love to be your wingman. :D
Thanks
I never heard of the term wingman before. Thanks for educating me in such a pleasant way. ;)
Great Story
This is a great story. I really felt the pull of the plot along with the turn on of the fucking.
Overall very enjoyable.
I thought this story was well written in general, and had a very good buildup leading to the couple's sexual encounter. I did think the dialog could have had more flow with the rest of the story, or maybe using description intertwined with the dialog to describe the characters' state of mind would have given it more continuity with the rest of the story. The dialog during sex seemed to be a little abrupt given that the rest of the story was so integrated and mellifluous.
CONGRATULATIONS!
Hugs and kisses and gropes and squeezes ... all that good stuff. ~Imp
Great stuff.
Good character devt. Rock on, man!
Great Descriptive Phrases
"Jason walked towards the table with a fresh longneck held low in his right hand as if this were Tombstone and someone were about to call “draw”."
I don't know why, but that one really made me smile.
Fun read, I felt like I was back in high school, (or college, as the case may be.)
Right the hell on!
Nicely done, Belegon! Of course, I have a particular weakness for the setting, too, but it was extremely well written and well detailed! A pleasure to read in many ways!
Yummy!
When I first ran across the story title, I immediately thought of Tom Cruise and "Top Gun" (yup, aging myself here). I was pleasantly surprised to see that you meant the other definition of "wingman".
Very good story ... very good twist at the end. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Rock on!
Excellent story. I loved the settings and the descriptions. Great job, keep it up.
Mmmm...collegiate poon
Awesome story, Bel! I'm sorry, but I can't bitch about a single thing. I'm hope your not offened by my lack of complaints. :D
Great story
I really enjoyed the story and the way you developed the characters and everything.
Hot and FUNNY!
Humor is as sexy as anything. I enjoyed the wry observations and the little twists of fate, and the honesty. Very fun story.
Now I have to change my underwear.
Where did that come from?
What's going on here? Character development in an erotic story? That's unheard of!
I enjoyed this, and it made me laugh more than once.
wow!
this is one out of maybe 3 erotic stories that are the best i have ever read. solid writing, great details, good build-up...all around a superb piece of literotica!
AWESOME!!!!
ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!!!! THE SEX SCENE WAS PERFECT!!! STORY WAS AMAZING!!! BRAVO, GREAT JOB!!!
Awesome read!
Great story!!
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