All Comments on 'Your skin'

Hi Snoopy

I really liked this. Very heart-felt; you touched my heart and brought a tear to my eye. Well done.

Lou ;)

I think you did a wonderful job, Snoopy. - Mindy

I realize English is not your first language,

However, you do far better in it than I could ever hope to do in a foreign tongue.

If you want comments,

then your theme of a pining lover who has been dumped is quite common

and pretty much used up.

Not all your rhymes are good.

Stanzas one and three could use another look,

and so could some of your word structure/arrangement.

I wouldn't be able to understand it, but if you have written poetry in German,

could you post one or two?

An audio poem would be great!

Then we could hear how a poem sounds in Deutsche!

I really don't know a lot about poetry, but for someone who uses English as a second language, your words spoke quite movingly.

Who cares if the theme has been used before, although that may be the understatement of the century? Its a concept that's always going to be around, so I hardly imagine people are going to stop writing about it. Wonderful stuff, Snoop, awkward and graceful all at once, smooth and yet halting. Could really feel the emotion that was put into the piece. I don't agree that your word structure needs work - I think its awkward enough to convey a sense of gritty reality, a sense of who you are, and far more effective than a flowing poem that is too polished. I can't claim to know that much about poetry myself of course, but these are just my thoughts.

Very touching poem, Snoop!